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PostSubject: the first turning   Tue Nov 04, 2008 7:32 pm

His name is Ephraim,he is a werewolf, he is about 6' even 225lbs muscular build, dark skin, shoulder length black hair, brown eyes. He is a kind and patient person but when the time calls for it he will act without hesistation, he does what is needed to be done no matter the cost, and has a lousy sense of direction >.>

Royal guard to his king as an escort to a far off land to negotiate a treaty, the escort was attacked by a beast that slaughtered all of his comrades, his king and almost him, he survived but just barely. as he lay there dying he looked at the moon and began to change,his bones broke and rejoined, he began to grow fur, after what seemed like an eternity of pain, he awoke and realized he was unable to stand he looked around and seen he' grown a tail and let out a noisethat came out a bark, which in turn caused him to jump, he had become a wolf. eventually he figured this out and started to run and he found that he liked it , he haerd things he had never before heard with stunning clarity, the sound of his paws on the ground made him run faster, and he could smell things he never knew had a smell, when he finally grew tired he stopped by a stream to drink, when he heard an noise before he realized it he had darted into a crouch in t some bushes as a doe come out of the treeline also to drink from the stream, unkowing of his prescence it walked right up to the stream almost straight in front of him. he had just realized his hunger, and bolted out of the bush and clamped his jaws onto the doe's neck before it could make a sound he forced it down to the ground its hot blood sliding does his throat as it suffocated. after eating most of his kill he drank form the stream and went to find a place to sleep he found a cave close to the stream and decide it was good enough and he slept.
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PostSubject: Re: the first turning   Tue Nov 04, 2008 8:01 pm

feel free to comment lol otherwise i start thinkin that nobody cares and i end up being an em kid (//_-) lol
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PostSubject: Re: the first turning   Wed Nov 05, 2008 4:31 pm

I like it. I would like it better if there were better punctuation, >.>, but it's good.
Also, this made me laugh out loud in the middle of a quiet study room:
"and has a lousy sense of direction >.>" XDDD

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PostSubject: Re: the first turning   Wed Nov 05, 2008 7:28 pm

lol sorry bout the punctuation i suck at it thats proly why i hated english i couldnt focus on the story i was always paying attention to what i would get counted off for >.> anyway ill porly write some more cause he isnt in Haven yet thats kinda why i wrote it this way lol.
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